Soundslide Critiques

October 25, 2007 at 3:01 pm · Filed under Uncategorized

Bikes and Repairs at UF

1.  Is there a real story?

Per se, no.  But I do think the soundslide illustrated well how and why the interviewee works or the Free Student Bike Repair.

2.   Explain…  For instance, when Ian was talking about racing bikes, I found that I wanted to see him work on his, or ride in different scenarios like commuting and racing.  Although, this might have pulled away from the focus of the bike repair shop.

3.  I don’t think that Curt’s intro could be a traditional hook to a storyline, no.   But again, it’s serves the purpose of helping us identify Ian throughout the rest of the piece.

4.  Ian introducing himself explains who he is, but it’s not necessarily the kind of lede that grabs you.

5. Yes, I liked the ending, and it did have a firm closing feel to it.

6.  I think the close in part because of the image of Ian and a woman from the back walking away, accompanied with the audio track indicating that bikes were going to be part of his life for a long period of time.  Kind of a feel-good ending.

7.  I think this story overlapped between campus life and profile mainly because we don’t leave campus in the telling of the story, which makes this differentiation kind of difficult.   So, roughly: this story is 30 percent about bike repair and 70 percent about a bike mechanic.

8.  Perhaps another way of focusing on the story rather than capturing a sense of the bike repair service, which Curt does very well with his photos, would have been to ask Ian more questions about what day-to-day life is like repairing bikes and include a greater percentage of those comments in the interview.  How did he learn to fix bikes?  What was the worst bike repair he’s ever had to take on working there?  I also would have like to hear some bike wheels spinning and other clicking-clacking bike sounds.

9.  As hokey as this might sound, I’m really digging the sound quality of his interview and the smooth editing.

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